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Liiiii-eeeeeet! nossy Send a noteboard - 16/03/2013 10:03:35 AM

Hi.


View original postIf you are going to give her a glorious death, then something along the lines of: "Bela struggled to regain her feet, but the long run had taken too much out of her, the wound too grievous. With a final exhausted heave, she rolled to her side and let out one last shuddering breath, then fell still."

See, that wasn't that hard, was it? Not to demean your clearly superior writing skills, of course.
View original postFor my money, I would much rather have seen her end up at Shayol Ghul and have Rand ride off on her. That would have been much more satisfying, if a bit on the mushy side.

I thought about that, but I also thought it would be a bit too contrived for my taste.
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Bela. Spoilers, of course. nossy - 15/03/2013 09:44:03 PM 1216 Views
well, look at it this way.... moondog - 15/03/2013 09:56:11 PM 943 Views
I've been looking back on the board for other opinions, but nossy - 15/03/2013 10:23:49 PM 830 Views
well, i think that's more to do with the author than the scene.... moondog - 18/03/2013 07:55:19 PM 777 Views
It certainly could have been worded differently.... Light in the Night - 16/03/2013 08:36:48 AM 738 Views
Liiiii-eeeeeet! nossy - 16/03/2013 10:03:35 AM 728 Views
Hey! Light in the Night - 17/03/2013 03:35:23 AM 808 Views
Where are you going to be when you aren't here? nossy - 17/03/2013 12:32:31 PM 839 Views
Re: Where are you going to be when you aren't here? Light in the Night - 19/03/2013 10:11:48 AM 641 Views
Re: Where are you going to be when you aren't here? nossy - 20/03/2013 08:37:32 PM 627 Views
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