A good solid Marxist analysis of the text is still lacking. You've pointed out some of the inherent contradictions in the capitalist system in the review, but it really needs to be brought home. "Poor writing is the highest stage of capitalism" might be a good phrase to try out. The notion that, when the intelligence of the proletariat has been completely subverted through social media, Twitter and books like Lu's, the capitalist system will begin its decay, is one that should be explored. The switch from manufacturing to finance, and from finance to a "service economy", and from that to a service economy that fails to deliver, is surely a progression that merits examination.

And don't let revisionists, Trotskyites or Maoists take you from doctrinal orthodoxy here. If ever you are tempted to bring in their ideas, just ask yourself, "What would Engels do?" and you should be fine (the answer always being, "grow the beard longer," I believe).