Re: I'd really love someone to do a good job of this.
DomA Send a noteboard - 31/01/2012 02:11:42 AM
Cut out all the superfluous dress and sniffing stuff, and make a really good read. The basis of a great story is there; it's just the execution that's lacking.
This always makes me laugh.
For fun we extrapolated from one novel in the mid-series just how many lines exactly are dealing with the "redundant body language" or the descriptions of clothes in one novel.
There was material for about a page in TFOH, which likely means there's something between one to two chapters' worth of it in the whole series, if it was all regrouped, perhaps 3 chapters to account for the books with a lot of Elayne and her wardrobe. Given the number of chapters, it's really a drop in the ocean.
The length of these descriptions is part of the problem, but not the way people usually think: Jordan made them too short and too formulaic, so they rapidly become boring and repetitive, it's not because he described the clothes in too many details.
Inspired by The Guardian, which books (classic or otherwise) do you think could be shorter?
30/01/2012 02:10:22 PM
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The Wheel of Time. *NM*
30/01/2012 02:59:03 PM
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I'd really love someone to do a good job of this.
30/01/2012 04:29:01 PM
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Re: I'd really love someone to do a good job of this.
31/01/2012 02:11:42 AM
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The Fires of Heaven is not the best example for that. It was too early.
31/01/2012 02:31:59 AM
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Re: The Fires of Heaven is not the best example for that. It was too early.
31/01/2012 03:35:36 AM
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I don't think Ivanhoe really needs to be pruned
30/01/2012 03:22:37 PM
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I remember thinking it was long and somewhat difficult when I read it at 13.
30/01/2012 04:31:13 PM
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Seconded, but it's been ages and I'd really need to reread first. *NM*
30/01/2012 10:33:53 PM
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Mansfield Park needs a jolly good rework.
30/01/2012 04:34:54 PM
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In fairness, all Mansfield Park needs to be cut is its heroine...
30/01/2012 10:34:43 PM
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"Could" be shorter doesn't always mean "should" be shorter.
31/01/2012 02:18:44 AM
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Re: "Could" be shorter doesn't always mean "should" be shorter.
31/01/2012 04:00:13 AM
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I think it's terribel thing to do... but may be The Magic Mountain could be a bit shorter... *NM*
31/01/2012 07:28:52 AM
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The Bible. Although I hear it's sort of been abridged before.
31/01/2012 04:46:28 PM
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Why would you cut out Matthew 1?
31/01/2012 05:11:24 PM
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Not all of it.
01/02/2012 04:14:13 PM
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I'd be all for cutting out/reformatting all the bloody NAMESin the old testament
31/01/2012 05:23:28 PM
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