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Sorry, that's just not true... fionwe1987 Send a noteboard - 28/09/2012 11:33:59 PM
You are correct that Jordan overdid the "internal stream of thought" a little too much, at times. But the complete absence of such a thing is plan bad writing. The author has to give us some cues about character interaction, be it in the form of facial expression and physical gestures of the people involved, or their tone of voice. That is completely absent with Sanderson. Same with the internal thoughts of the PoV character. They serve a double purpose. They let us see how a character reacts to a conversation, but they're also absolutely essential to showing how the character changes in response to conversation. If Egwene's position vis a vis her trust of Elayne has changed due to Elayne dealing with the Kinswomen, we have to know. Because this is going to have serious repercussions down to the line, and if we see Egwene's thoughts here, her later actions will make more sense, and will not need an explanation either.

The problem is, Sanderson gives us the skeleton of the scene, but none of the actual flesh. Its like disembodied voices are occupying the scene, so much so that there are several instances where the character starts a dialogue in one place, and has then moved by the end of it with the reader clueless as to when this happened. For example, read the scene where Egwene reveals to the Rebel Hall that there are BA among them, and then Moria gets up to run away. What follows is a pathetic mess. Egwene is in all sorts of positions and places as if by magic, and the same with the Sitters.

Rectifying these issues actually doesn't take much space, and as DomA said, actually ends up saving the need for more scenes. Its not a matter of preference. These are basic rules for good creative writing.
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If you have to call someone "my friend" three times in a couple of minutes, he isn't. - 28/09/2012 11:59:13 AM 5761 Views
John McCain has a similar proclivity. *NM* - 28/09/2012 12:26:29 PM 1152 Views
The only people I've ever heard say "my friend" are foreign street vendors - 28/09/2012 01:19:00 PM 1103 Views
Potential customer = best kind of friend *NM* - 28/09/2012 02:20:29 PM 634 Views
I agree in this particular instance. - 28/09/2012 03:38:15 PM 1420 Views
Maybe they have been Quakers all along? *NM* - 28/09/2012 03:39:24 PM 779 Views
Sanderson's handling of character interractions is pathetic.... - 28/09/2012 06:43:48 PM 1286 Views
Now see, here I don't fully agree, or at least think it's a matter of taste. - 28/09/2012 07:21:09 PM 1966 Views
Sorry, that's just not true... - 28/09/2012 11:33:59 PM 1152 Views
A few things. - 29/09/2012 02:40:47 AM 1381 Views
Great rebuttal! Fionwe got burned! *NM* - 29/09/2012 04:00:41 PM 845 Views
Re: A few things. - 30/09/2012 06:07:57 PM 1634 Views
I posted something very similar at DM. Reposting... - 28/09/2012 11:46:07 PM 1148 Views
Re: I posted something very similar at DM. Reposting... - 29/09/2012 01:51:20 AM 1369 Views
Yes! - 29/09/2012 02:26:39 AM 1304 Views
This is one of my biggest pet peeves as well - 29/09/2012 04:56:53 AM 1281 Views
There are people who say that? - 29/09/2012 05:16:58 AM 1143 Views
I complained about this regarding the Forsaken chapter - 28/09/2012 07:34:25 PM 1403 Views
I've long since accepted that Sanderson uses inaccurate terms like "powerful" - 29/09/2012 05:44:11 AM 1402 Views
To be fair, the last Moghedian PoV by RJ might have changed her a bit. - 29/09/2012 03:27:31 PM 1126 Views
Which is the question I brought up in another thread - 29/09/2012 05:29:01 PM 1026 Views
The burning question to me, after reading all of the comments above, is this... - 29/09/2012 08:50:50 AM 1341 Views
Piggybacking on someone else's established characters and near-climax-point plot? - 29/09/2012 03:04:03 PM 1380 Views
Both of you disgust me - 29/09/2012 04:13:16 PM 1308 Views
This is not jealousy, it's being upset - 29/09/2012 07:52:51 PM 1183 Views
They could have hired a ghost writer. They chose not to. *NM* - 29/09/2012 09:34:27 PM 9836 Views
Your crappy taste in books means nothing - 30/09/2012 09:23:51 PM 1694 Views
When did I ever say Eli Manning wasn't a good QB? - 01/10/2012 03:40:21 PM 1087 Views
To be fair... - 29/09/2012 04:36:52 PM 1185 Views
True ... He may not be perfect, and he certainly made some strange choices - 29/09/2012 05:37:29 PM 1013 Views
B-Sand is not a ghost writer - 29/09/2012 06:35:16 PM 2454 Views
Didn't say he should. - 29/09/2012 09:07:45 PM 1754 Views
I mostly agree with this. - 29/09/2012 09:36:38 PM 1368 Views
What is it you want? - 29/09/2012 09:39:36 PM 1345 Views
We want to bitch about an inferior product. Duh. - 29/09/2012 10:00:09 PM 1601 Views
Hmm that's true I guess. Sad though *NM* - 29/09/2012 10:07:25 PM 548 Views
It is what it is - 30/09/2012 12:52:20 AM 905 Views
Those are not remotely the same thing - 30/09/2012 09:14:49 PM 1181 Views
But they are the same in this instance - 30/09/2012 10:01:59 PM 1087 Views
It's fairly simple.... - 30/09/2012 09:55:52 PM 1340 Views
Thanks for that insightful response... - 30/09/2012 10:37:27 PM 1063 Views
Forgotten Realms is big on clever spells and magic systems? - 01/10/2012 05:27:05 AM 1020 Views
It's more... - 01/10/2012 01:05:18 PM 1783 Views
Did you read Way of Kings? - 03/10/2012 09:14:43 PM 1295 Views
No, nothing but the prologue - 04/10/2012 02:56:14 AM 1038 Views
Re: The burning question to me, after reading all of the comments above, is this... - 11/10/2012 08:22:27 PM 928 Views

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