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Sorry, that's just not true... fionwe1987 Send a noteboard - 28/09/2012 11:33:59 PM
You are correct that Jordan overdid the "internal stream of thought" a little too much, at times. But the complete absence of such a thing is plan bad writing. The author has to give us some cues about character interaction, be it in the form of facial expression and physical gestures of the people involved, or their tone of voice. That is completely absent with Sanderson. Same with the internal thoughts of the PoV character. They serve a double purpose. They let us see how a character reacts to a conversation, but they're also absolutely essential to showing how the character changes in response to conversation. If Egwene's position vis a vis her trust of Elayne has changed due to Elayne dealing with the Kinswomen, we have to know. Because this is going to have serious repercussions down to the line, and if we see Egwene's thoughts here, her later actions will make more sense, and will not need an explanation either.

The problem is, Sanderson gives us the skeleton of the scene, but none of the actual flesh. Its like disembodied voices are occupying the scene, so much so that there are several instances where the character starts a dialogue in one place, and has then moved by the end of it with the reader clueless as to when this happened. For example, read the scene where Egwene reveals to the Rebel Hall that there are BA among them, and then Moria gets up to run away. What follows is a pathetic mess. Egwene is in all sorts of positions and places as if by magic, and the same with the Sitters.

Rectifying these issues actually doesn't take much space, and as DomA said, actually ends up saving the need for more scenes. Its not a matter of preference. These are basic rules for good creative writing.
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If you have to call someone "my friend" three times in a couple of minutes, he isn't. - 28/09/2012 11:59:13 AM 5755 Views
John McCain has a similar proclivity. *NM* - 28/09/2012 12:26:29 PM 1148 Views
The only people I've ever heard say "my friend" are foreign street vendors - 28/09/2012 01:19:00 PM 1095 Views
Potential customer = best kind of friend *NM* - 28/09/2012 02:20:29 PM 629 Views
I agree in this particular instance. - 28/09/2012 03:38:15 PM 1413 Views
Maybe they have been Quakers all along? *NM* - 28/09/2012 03:39:24 PM 776 Views
Sanderson's handling of character interractions is pathetic.... - 28/09/2012 06:43:48 PM 1281 Views
Now see, here I don't fully agree, or at least think it's a matter of taste. - 28/09/2012 07:21:09 PM 1962 Views
Sorry, that's just not true... - 28/09/2012 11:33:59 PM 1142 Views
A few things. - 29/09/2012 02:40:47 AM 1377 Views
Great rebuttal! Fionwe got burned! *NM* - 29/09/2012 04:00:41 PM 840 Views
Re: A few things. - 30/09/2012 06:07:57 PM 1627 Views
I posted something very similar at DM. Reposting... - 28/09/2012 11:46:07 PM 1141 Views
Re: I posted something very similar at DM. Reposting... - 29/09/2012 01:51:20 AM 1361 Views
Yes! - 29/09/2012 02:26:39 AM 1294 Views
This is one of my biggest pet peeves as well - 29/09/2012 04:56:53 AM 1270 Views
There are people who say that? - 29/09/2012 05:16:58 AM 1134 Views
I complained about this regarding the Forsaken chapter - 28/09/2012 07:34:25 PM 1394 Views
I've long since accepted that Sanderson uses inaccurate terms like "powerful" - 29/09/2012 05:44:11 AM 1395 Views
To be fair, the last Moghedian PoV by RJ might have changed her a bit. - 29/09/2012 03:27:31 PM 1118 Views
Which is the question I brought up in another thread - 29/09/2012 05:29:01 PM 1020 Views
The burning question to me, after reading all of the comments above, is this... - 29/09/2012 08:50:50 AM 1331 Views
Piggybacking on someone else's established characters and near-climax-point plot? - 29/09/2012 03:04:03 PM 1371 Views
Both of you disgust me - 29/09/2012 04:13:16 PM 1299 Views
This is not jealousy, it's being upset - 29/09/2012 07:52:51 PM 1176 Views
They could have hired a ghost writer. They chose not to. *NM* - 29/09/2012 09:34:27 PM 9831 Views
Your crappy taste in books means nothing - 30/09/2012 09:23:51 PM 1688 Views
When did I ever say Eli Manning wasn't a good QB? - 01/10/2012 03:40:21 PM 1081 Views
To be fair... - 29/09/2012 04:36:52 PM 1178 Views
True ... He may not be perfect, and he certainly made some strange choices - 29/09/2012 05:37:29 PM 974 Views
B-Sand is not a ghost writer - 29/09/2012 06:35:16 PM 2448 Views
Didn't say he should. - 29/09/2012 09:07:45 PM 1746 Views
I mostly agree with this. - 29/09/2012 09:36:38 PM 1357 Views
What is it you want? - 29/09/2012 09:39:36 PM 1335 Views
We want to bitch about an inferior product. Duh. - 29/09/2012 10:00:09 PM 1527 Views
Hmm that's true I guess. Sad though *NM* - 29/09/2012 10:07:25 PM 540 Views
It is what it is - 30/09/2012 12:52:20 AM 898 Views
Those are not remotely the same thing - 30/09/2012 09:14:49 PM 1169 Views
But they are the same in this instance - 30/09/2012 10:01:59 PM 1080 Views
It's fairly simple.... - 30/09/2012 09:55:52 PM 1332 Views
Thanks for that insightful response... - 30/09/2012 10:37:27 PM 1057 Views
Forgotten Realms is big on clever spells and magic systems? - 01/10/2012 05:27:05 AM 1013 Views
It's more... - 01/10/2012 01:05:18 PM 1773 Views
Did you read Way of Kings? - 03/10/2012 09:14:43 PM 1287 Views
No, nothing but the prologue - 04/10/2012 02:56:14 AM 1027 Views
Re: The burning question to me, after reading all of the comments above, is this... - 11/10/2012 08:22:27 PM 920 Views

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