Outstanding, you really must grace us with creations wholly yours.
Joel Send a noteboard - 11/01/2011 02:03:38 AM
My only quibble is that it was a little jarring to see Egwene use the word "okay" (I may simply be forgetting Jordan or Sandersons use of it, but it struck me as out of place; I humbly suggest replacing it with "alright", but that's only a suggestion). You wrote both naturally and well, and the result was true to the narrative, suspenseful and riveting. Some of the dramatic tension obviously comes from episodes we've long expected, but that's a mixed blessing; twenty years worth of expectations from millions of readers can be very hard to satisfy, as I'm sure Sanderson would agree. Your version of these events flowed far more credibly and evenly than his Tower of Ghenjei OR Jordans revelations in KoD of how that would unfold. That both of those scenes felt stilted and choppy but these did not speaks volumes about your writing ability. The prospect of Mats reunion with Tuon being preceded by the capture of Moiraine and Thom was completely unexpected, and all the more fascinating for that, yet as unexpected as it was it's perfectly logical within the context of their aid to Mat in retrieving the Horn, which is also reasonable against the Shadows attack on Caemlyn. Moiraine's so noble that even Mat will sacrifice an eye to save her (despite her being Aes Sedai) but Tuon puts a collar around her neck; he really is far too good for her....
Honorbound and honored to be Bonded to Mahtaliel Sedai
Last First in wotmania Chat
Slightly better than chocolate.
Love still can't be coerced.
Please Don't Eat the Newbies!
LoL. Be well, RAFOlk.
Last First in wotmania Chat
Slightly better than chocolate.
Love still can't be coerced.
Please Don't Eat the Newbies!
LoL. Be well, RAFOlk.
I wrote a Fan Fiction that takes place directly after ToM
10/01/2011 12:59:00 AM
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Isn't it nice when main characters actually talk to each other? *NM*
10/01/2011 07:39:30 AM
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Re: I wrote a Fan Fiction that takes place directly after ToM
10/01/2011 11:01:21 AM
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Quick, someone tell BJ about it, so he can do a better job on the next book ....
10/01/2011 03:29:22 PM
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I like fanfiction, and I liked your overall approach to the scene
10/01/2011 04:31:00 PM
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Wow, I've never read good fan fiction before, but that was GREAT!
10/01/2011 05:12:32 PM
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Outstanding, you really must grace us with creations wholly yours.
11/01/2011 02:03:38 AM
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This is very good!
12/01/2011 07:00:14 AM
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He didn't go to her to deal with Caemlyn
12/01/2011 03:09:16 PM
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Ah, okay
12/01/2011 07:47:59 PM
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Wow. I nearly forgot I was reading Fan Fiction! There is one thing,
12/01/2011 07:56:15 PM
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imho, I wish they'd chosen *you* to take over instead of BSand. It's not like he sucks, but I enjoy
02/02/2011 01:42:53 AM
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