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Re: I'd really love someone to do a good job of this. DomA Send a noteboard - 31/01/2012 02:11:42 AM
Cut out all the superfluous dress and sniffing stuff, and make a really good read. The basis of a great story is there; it's just the execution that's lacking.


This always makes me laugh.

For fun we extrapolated from one novel in the mid-series just how many lines exactly are dealing with the "redundant body language" or the descriptions of clothes in one novel.

There was material for about a page in TFOH, which likely means there's something between one to two chapters' worth of it in the whole series, if it was all regrouped, perhaps 3 chapters to account for the books with a lot of Elayne and her wardrobe. Given the number of chapters, it's really a drop in the ocean.

The length of these descriptions is part of the problem, but not the way people usually think: Jordan made them too short and too formulaic, so they rapidly become boring and repetitive, it's not because he described the clothes in too many details.
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Re: I'd really love someone to do a good job of this. - 31/01/2012 02:11:42 AM 844 Views
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